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Please help me to improve this image.
I hope there is no assumption here that the views we share here are absolute and correct Obviously it is just our views. If the image you made works for you/pleases you then image is a success. You are the best judge of your work. Being critical about it often helps us grow. I have seen a few friends of mine who are overly worried about a group in England approving their work for a fellowship It is not mathematics, it is art ! everyone is right. If we produce work that fits others taste then it is a failure. With that philosophical note...
Hearing others thoughts at times may be interesting. See if this works for you - to me, this is far more interesting than peacock being in clear focus. Not because everything blur is more appealing. There are very subtle nuances of the images which are often difficult explain. In this image I kind of like the scratched appeal. I think hiding the identity of subject would have added to the interest. A print on canvas may be appealing.