Rishit, I think you took a great challenge - portraying sound. I think your previous image portrayed sound (calmness) better than this one. I really don't know how to portray a loud sound. I think the challenge here is the details of the 'crash' has a tendency towards a visual engagement which may lead us else where. While appreciate the problem you are trying to solve, I don't know how to do it effectively either
Will look forward to your next attempt.